MODEL SENTENCE: The gallows stood in a small yard, separate from the main grounds of the prison and overgrown with tall prickly weeds.-George Orwell, Burmese Days
IMITATION: This one fox stood out from the rest, silver with black paws and a long sleek tail that trailed in the dust behind the beautiful beast.
MODEL SENTENCE: The real art that dealt with life directly was that of the first men who told their stories round the savage camp-fire,-Robert Louis Stevenson, "A Humble Remonstrance"
IMITATION: The Doctor looked around himself at the majestic beauty of the 31st centuries sky and the planets that he knew were around him.
MODEL SENTENCE: If one must worship a bully, it is better that he should be a policeman than a gangster.- George Orwell, "Raffles and Miss Blandish"
IMITATION: Looking at the wrekage around him Jack thought, I would rather be face to face with a weevil than earn Ianto's wrath.
MODEL SENTENCE: He went through the narrow alley of Temple Bar quickly, muttering to himself that they could all go to hell because he was going to have a good night of it.-James Joyce, "counterparts"
VARIATION OF THE PATTERN: He went through the narrow alley of Temple Bar quickly, they could all go to hell because he was going to have a good night of it he muttered.
ALTERNATE EXPRESSIONS: As he went through the narrow alley of Temple Bar, as quickly as he could, he murttered to himself, "You can all go to hell." He was going to have a good night of it.
Walking quickly through the narrow alley of Temple Bar he muttered, "You can all go to hell. I am going to have a good night of it."
Posted by chibihi on September 30, 2008
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